So one thing in my life that was a really bad situation that turned out to be a blessing in disguise was the breakup of my first serious band NightSlasher. Basically what happened was everyone slowly but surely became unmotivated and lost interest. After 5 years of hard work we really weren't getting anywhere, many of the members became unreliable and started focusing on life outside of the band, which is perfectly okay, but at the time it really sucked. The straw that broke the camels back was when we had to cancel our studio sessions to make our first real album, that was kinda the only thing that was keeping everyone in the band was the hope that our album would happen, but unfortunately the plans fell through. So most of us went our separate ways me and a couple of the others started a new band.
At first when it happened I was actually kinda happy, but once we made the announcement on our facebook page and a lot of our fans got pretty upset, I actually started to get really sad. I thought I might've made a huge mistake and messed up what could've ended up being a really good thing. Starting the new band was extremely slow and tedious as well and for a while I didn't know if going through the process of finding all new people and making all new songs would be worth it, I knew eventually that's what I would have to do, but I started to think about taking time off from music.
I didn't though. Because once the new band actually came together it breathed new life into me. Now I realize that breaking up the old band was the best decision I could've made. This new one is working out so well and I honestly feel we're 10000x better than the old one. We have better songs and just better and nicer and more dedicated people. I'm much happier now than I ever was with the old band.
Psychological Alchemy
An entrance to the mind
What lies beneath?
What don't we know
That in reality
Deep down we do know
It is a key
To unlock the door to the mind
And unlock the door to our minds mind
Find the hidden passageways inside
Show us who we really are
What drives us
Why we do what we do
Why we are who we are
All the questions have answers
All we have to do is look
At ourselves
Drew,
ReplyDeleteGood blog... still a little late and a little rushed, but closer to what is needed. I hope that by next week, you'll be fully back on the rails.
Good story - good example of a time of alchemy. You tell the story well, very well, but I think your conclusion paragraph needs more explanation - just to highlight how things are much better now. That paragraph should be the strongest and most convincing to the reader, so that they can see that your ability to alchemize this situation led to a truly golden outcome. Explain that gold, or its shine, a little more.
Your poem is solid, if a little short. I'd say to double its length (next week). But I really like the idea that you have to open up the mind of the mind. Very cool concept that requires some higher level thinking... about thoughts. It's a great idea for your poem and how to define alchemy.
I would suggest (1) writing a bit more and (2) starting to let the language lead you, instead of you leading it. What would happen if you let go of the control when writing, and you allowed for the poem to start writing itself? You'll have to let your mind get a little lost in the flow of it, and stray away from the ideas, per se. See if you can do that, so that your poems start to include more abstract lines. Let them grow a little wild.
GR: 75 (late)